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The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.
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The table illustrates the different
age
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 groups of
people
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 who preferred a variety of Television programs in Europe county in the year 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are six categories of TV channels. The Sports and Featured films have a high percentage of
viewers
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.
To begin
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 with, Cartoon has 29 rates of
people
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 who come from the 11-15
age
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group
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.
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, 18 per
cent
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 of humans watch them from the 15-20
year old
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 category. Featured films have high
viewers
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 of 23% in the 15- 20
age
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group
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 and 20 per
cent
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from
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 the 21- 25
age
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group
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.
In addition
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, the News channel has high
viewers
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 in the
age
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 of 21-25,
as well as
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, it has 19 per
cent
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 of subscribers in the
age
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 of 15-20.
On the other hand
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, Soap opera has 19 per
cent
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 of
people
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 from the
age
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 21-25, but it has the least
viewers
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 from the
age
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 of 15 to 20.
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, TV dramas are preferred by fewer humans, but 13% of
people
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 prefer them from the 20 to 25
age
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group
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.
Along with
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this
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 citizens prefer sports channels a lot, 22 per
cent
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 of
viewers
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 are kids and 21% are from the 20 to 25
age
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 category.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, viewers, group, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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