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Band 4.5

The maps gives information about changes by civil work in island.

The maps gives information about changes by civil work in island.
The images
gives
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give
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 information about changes
by
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in
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 civil work
in
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on
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island
Add an article
the island
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. The maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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an
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a
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 progressive work
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
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lead
Wrong verb form
led
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 to civilization and tourism on
island
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the island
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. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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can be seen from the picture before the civil work island was so empty and there were not any specialized
area
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areas
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to
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for
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 hiking,
to swim
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swimming
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 and
convenient
Correct article usage
a convenient
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 place to live
in
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apply
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. But
it is clear that
Linking Words
 several changes like building new on rounded order accommodations on the west and east of the map, transport road to the
pierce
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pier
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 and prolonged trap to swim area at the western corner made it possible.
Linking Words
Also
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,Also
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 check in on suitable
location
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locations
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 for all and
restaurant
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restaurants
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 with
view
Correct article usage
a view
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 to the sea
attracts
Wrong verb form
attract
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 tourists.
However
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, there is no
any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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ecological difference
can
Correct pronoun usage
that can
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 be seen from the maps. There is
big
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a big
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 distinction
on
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between
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 the size of
trap
Correct article usage
the trap
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 to walk and
road
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the road
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 to go on by transport. And by construction pier ships became able to moor at the eastern side.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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