The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

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The maps portray the town of Norbiton in a particular

indrustrial

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industrial

area with the future developmental planned for the certain site. The general overview is that when comparing the two maps, there are

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changes taking place

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space after a later development plan. Not only many facilities were constructed

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this

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town, but

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the land is used for various

activitie

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activity

purposes. At

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present, the map before the construction, the Norbiton was undeveloped with numerous

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factories to be circled by a huge roundabout.

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, there are lengthy

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and spacious farmland located in the north. Moving on to the second map, it can be seen that in the future the factories will be demolished and replaced by houses to become a residential area.

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, there are new playground and school was

buit

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built

in the east. And there are extended tiny

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on the south, where

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center

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(east) and shops (west) were set up close

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, the north is being established a bridge across the river throughout the new housing zone, where

is being displace

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from the agricultural land and

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shifted to the

north-eastern

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northeastern

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nearby.

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Logical structure

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The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

Overpopulaiton in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. what are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a new foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Reporting of crimes and other kinds of violent news on television and in newspapers can have adverse consquences. This kind of information should be restricted from being shown in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?