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The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.
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The maps portray the town of Norbiton in a particular
indrustrial
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industrial
 area with the future developmental planned for the certain site. The general overview is that when comparing the two maps, there are
significantly
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 changes taking place
on
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this
 space after a later development plan. Not only many facilities were constructed
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this
 town, but
also
 the land is used for various
activitie
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activity
 purposes. At
the
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present, the map before the construction, the Norbiton was undeveloped with numerous
of
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factories to be circled by a huge roundabout.
Furthermore
, there are lengthy
river
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 and spacious farmland located in the north. Moving on to the second map, it can be seen that in the future the factories will be demolished and replaced by houses to become a residential area.
Moreover
, there are new playground and school was
buit
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built
 in the east. And there are extended tiny
roundabout
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 on the south, where
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center
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 (east) and shops (west) were set up close
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.
In addition
, the north is being established a bridge across the river throughout the new housing zone, where
is being displace
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 from the agricultural land and
it
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shifted to the
north-eastern
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northeastern
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 nearby.
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