The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The graph gives us some information about the account of
shops
that opening or closure. In 2011 and 2015 the
number
of
shops
that opened was more than the
number
of
shops
that closed. It's the only two years that opened are more than closures. It means that the economy at that time was scent and people had desires and enough money to buy what they wanted. In 2012, many
shops
that opened in 2011 led to the
number
that opened in 2012 decreasing and the
number
of closures more than opened. In 2014, the
number
of
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that closed and opened almost had a balance means that the economy at the moment is not well that people open a shop quickly and
also
close quickly. In 2015, the
number
of
shops
that closed sharply decreased but the
number
of
shops
that opened wasn't that much because the
number
of
shops
that closed
last
year was too much causing people afraid of opening a shop. After 2018 the
number
of
shops
that opened is getting less than ever.
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  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • decline
  • increase
  • peak
  • trough
  • magnitude
  • trend
  • surpass
  • plummet
  • annual
  • consecutive
  • closure rate
  • inception rate
  • net growth
  • commercial landscape
  • retail sector
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