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The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.
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The maps show us the changes in Norbiton town development. The new Norbiton industrial area will be very different from now. All factories will be changed to housing or commercial areas. There will be lots of housing so there gonna be many children will live here so there will be a school in the east of the town and they
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 will build a Playground near the school for children to have fun. There will be a bridge in the middle of the
river
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 and there will be a road that can cross the
river
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 and the other side of the
river
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 will be changed from only farmland to a mix of farmland and housing. Making more roads makes people can go to more places so the centre of the town will be two more roads one is across the
river
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 and the other is built with housing. At the centre, there is a medical centre and shops for residents to arrive more conveniently.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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