The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

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The maps show us the changes in Norbiton town development. The new Norbiton industrial area will be very different from now. All factories will be changed to housing or commercial areas. There will be lots of housing so there gonna be many children will live here so there will be a school in the east of the town and they

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will build a Playground near the school for children to have fun. There will be a bridge in the middle of the

river

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and there will be a road that can cross the

river

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and the other side of the

river

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will be changed from only farmland to a mix of farmland and housing. Making more roads makes people can go to more places so the centre of the town will be two more roads one is across the

river

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and the other is built with housing. At the centre, there is a medical centre and shops for residents to arrive more conveniently.

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The map belows shows the industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned futrure development of the site.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

The average annual expenditure of college students from three countries.

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Both government and individual are spending vast amount of money protecting animals and their habitats. This money could be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and healthcare. To what extent do you agree or disagree?