The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The graph
illustrations
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the data about in 1968 and 2018 how family
spented
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spend
spent
their money in weekly in one country.
Overall
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, people
spended
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spent
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a lot of money
in
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on
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food
campared
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compared
to other
typs
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types
of
speading
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spending
spreading
speeding
was highest
un
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in
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1968.
However
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,
this
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partent
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parent
had
change
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in 2018,
the
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family using their money equally
in
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for
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food,
gousing
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housing
and leisure.
Firstly
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, the
speading
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spreading
speeding
type of food was
most
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apply
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higher than
other type
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another type
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around 35% in 1968
,
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but decreased
dramatic
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in 2018. In
addtion
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addition
, the percentage of
speading
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spending
speeding
in housing and clothing was similar
perseatage
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percentage
become
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became
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secound
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second
higher
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than thps
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thps
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that
of
speading
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spending
speeding
spreading
around 10%.
On the other hand
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, household goods, personal goods and transport
was
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were
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nearly 10%.
Secondly
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, there was
diferent partent
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different parties
in 2018. The percentage of leisure was
highest
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spending compared to
other type
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another type
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also
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more than double that of 1968.
Furthermore
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housing
speading
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spreading
spending
speeding
in 2018 was
also
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higher
tham
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than
1968
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in 1968
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around 10%
become
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becoming
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second
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the second
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highest
speading
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spending
spreading
speeding
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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