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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Nowadays one of the noticeable problems is traffic congestion. To tackle
this
 issue, there is an idea expressing imposing a heavy tax on private car ownership by the government would be the solution.
This
 essay will discuss some benefits and drawbacks of
such
 a measure. One of the benefits arises from
this
 approach is that enhances the
quality
 of public
transportation
 which leads to individuals utilizing more.
Consequently
, it prevents air pollution because of less
use
 of private cars and people can enjoy a fresh atmosphere which decreases some diseases
such
 as asthma and lung cancer
due to
 exhaust and toxic gases, CO2, NO2, and SO2.
Furthermore
, by spending money to improve the
quality
 of public transport they actually solve the notable reason for refusing to
use
 public
transportation
.
For example
, mankind prefers to feel safe and time-reserving like their own car and by increasing the
quality
 of
transportation
, they tend to
use
 them as well. Nations,
however
, tend to utilize well-designed and convenient buses and trains. High taxes would generate more money to make necessary changes.
Nevertheless
, there are two paramount drawbacks to
this
 solution.
Firstly
, there would be a heavy burden on car drivers owing to the amount of taxes is already significant.
This
 means people with low financial wealth can not afford to pay taxes and refuse to
use
 it
while
 it is their daily usage.
Secondly
, through
this
 kind of "price discrimination" policy, wealthy folk may ignore
this
 law and prefer to pay money
instead
 of avoiding using an automobile.
To conclude
,
this
 solution is worth considering to address the traffic issue which provides some advantages,
for instance
, better
quality
 of
transportation
 and reduced polluted air and disadvantages, take the example of.
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