In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

It is true that
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the population
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is
aging
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ageing
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at staggering rates around the globe.
Although
it can cause additional problems
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the government, I believe that
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the advantages
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of
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outweights
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outweighs
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the disadvantages. On the one hand,
ageing
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an ageing
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population
can be devastating for the economy of a country and create extra expenditures. Since old
people
are usually retired, so they do not contribute to the upturn in economic growth, but
otherwise
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the countrie’s
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countrie’s
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country’s
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budget on their monthly payments.
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,
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cases when
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an elderly
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person is abandoned by his family,
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the government
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takes responsibility for his provision.
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,
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many nations spend numerous healthcare, financial,
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and workforce
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resources on
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funding
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elderly houses.
Thus
, as more
population
will live longer, more resources will be exploited
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such
purposes.
On the other hand
, elderly
people
have
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plenty of experience under their belt, which can be useful for
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development. Old
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people
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are
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a source
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of wisdom and knowledge, which can be shared with new generations.
As a result
,
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decision
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will be more considerable and fundamental, taking into account all possible hazards.
Moreover
, living longer was an impossible desire of
people
and a major reason to establish countries. So
people
should appreciate the fact that they can spend more time with their close
people
.
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,
this
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surge in the level of
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happiness
worldwide.
To conclude
,
although
,
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ageing
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the ageing
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population
is a financial burden, it still will benefit our society in terms of cultural values and
individuals
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individual
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demands in
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a longer
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lifespan.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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