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The main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertaiment not to shop. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, with the rapid growth of online shopping, it is easy for
people
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 to buy the items they want right at their homes.
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, there are opinions that in the future,
people
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 will go to shopping
malls
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 only for entertainment, not for shopping. It cannot be denied that with the strong development of online shopping, the idea of ​​shopping alone is not enough to keep the business of shopping
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 in the business.
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, I still think that there are
people
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 who go to shopping
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 to buy goods.
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there's a lot more to entertainment than a central business district.
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, an amusement park where you will find things that a shopping
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 doesn't have
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 as roller coasters, Ferris wheel, etc.
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it would be strange if a place called a shopping
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 didn't have any stores in it. Every year there is still a very high percentage of shoppers going to the shopping
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. For them, the entertainment inside the shopping
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 is just an added element that makes their shopping trip more enjoyable. In short, I always believe that there will be
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 going to the shopping
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 to shop. Anyway, it's hard to imagine the shopping
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 without any shopping going on inside it.

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