courses in music and art should be compulsory for student in high school. Do you agree or disagree with the idea?

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A glance at a table provided reveals the data of temperatures and
hours
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of daylight of two distinct megacities namely
Mumbai
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and
Moscow
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on the weekends in 2007, counted in C
degree
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.
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,
although
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Mumbai
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’s
duration
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was much hotter than that of
Moscow
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,
Moscow
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has longer daylight
hours
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. In terms of
temperature
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, in
Mumbai
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, the margin of
duration
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was stable. The min
temperature
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remained unchanged at 29
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degree
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degrees
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in
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for
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three days,
whereas
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, Saturday was the hottest
day
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with
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at
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35
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degree
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degrees
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. In
Moscow
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, the range of
temperature
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was significantly erratic.
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its max
temperature
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maintained
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from 8 to 10
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degree
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degrees
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on the weekend, the min one witnessed an erratic fluctuation.
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While on
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On
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Friday, the min
duration
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started at 4 before rapidly increasing to 9, followed by a sharp drop to 3 on Sunday which was the warmest
day
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. Regarding the
duration
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, the period of
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day time
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daytime
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in
Mumbai
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was 10
hours
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while
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that of
Moscow
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was 18
hours
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which was much longer.
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the sun in
Mumbai
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rose at exactly 6
a.
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a.m.
m
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and set at about 4
p.
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p.m.
m
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,
Moscow
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started a
day
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at merely 5
a.
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a.m.
m
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and ended at over 10 p.
m
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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