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The diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks from clay for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks from clay for the building industry.
#process #bricks #clay #industry
The diagram represents the order in
how
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which
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bricks
 are produced for the building industry.
According to
 the diagram, the process has various seven steps,
a
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the
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 first is claying by digger, and the
last
 one is delivery delivers made
bricks
 to building companies. At the beginning, the digger digs clay. After
clay
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the clay
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is filter
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is filtered
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 with
metal
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the metal
a metal
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 grid in a roller. Next mixture
cuts
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is cut
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 in
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or keeps in a mould to figure them before
it
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apply
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sand and water
adds
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are added
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. Later formed
bricks
sends
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are sent
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 to
drying
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the drying
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 oven for about
to
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apply
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24-48 hours.
Following
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The following
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bricks
goes
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go
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 to
kiln
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the kiln
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 to moderate them
in
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at
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 200-980 degrees up to 870-1300, in a cooling chamber moderated
bricks
freezes
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freeze
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to
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for
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 2-3 days. The penultimate step is
packaging
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the packaging
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 and delivery stage
transform
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transforming
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bricks
to
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into
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 customers.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brick-making
  • clay extraction
  • moulding
  • drying oven
  • kiln
  • firing process
  • cooling
  • quality control
  • environmental sustainability
  • building industry
  • raw materials
  • traditional versus modern
  • manufacturing process
  • packaging
  • transportation
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