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In 1980s it was a pretty popular attraction, but in 1985 and 1995 visitors suddenly increased from 26%

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1980s
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 it was a pretty popular attraction, but in 1985 and 1995 visitors suddenly increased from 26% to almost 50%.Visitors
of
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 the Pier
also
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 fluctuated
from
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 1980 and 2005,
then
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 it had
rised
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risen
raised
 and significantly made the Art gallery the worst
between
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among
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 all Brighton attractions. On the whole, all Brighton
attraction
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attractions
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 had a lot of changes. For the whole period Festival
had
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experienced a bit of fluctuations, and it was the most peaceful one.It ended the year up as the
second best
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 attraction in England.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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