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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.
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The given table indicates the percentages of students who enrolled at four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. Taken as a whole, obviously, there was a downward trend seen in
specialist
,
grammar
 and voluntary-controlled
schools
;
nevertheless
, the
last
 type of
schools
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, community, experienced a remarkable increase, particularly peaking in the
year
 2009.
To begin
 with, more than half of the students totalstudents’total enrolled in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 in 2000, the figure regarding community
schools
 was just 12
percent
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, equal to that of
specialist
schools
. At the same
times
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time
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,
grammar
schools
 represented
to
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just under one-four of the
students
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total
 After five years, the proportion of learners attending community
schools
 increased by 20
percent
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 and surged well to well over 50
percent
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per cent
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 in the
year
 2009. An opposite trend could be observed in the case of voluntary-controlled
schools
 as their figure dipped to 38
percent
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 in the
year
 2005 and 20
percent
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 in 2009
Grammar
Schools
 and
Specialist
Schools
also
 saw declines in attendance but less noticeable. The percentage of learners in
grammar
schools
 dropped marginally from 24
percent
 in 2000 to 19
percent
 in the
year
 2005 and period at 10
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per cent
 in 2009, meanwhile,
specialist
schools
becamebecoming
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became
 11
percent
 in 2005 and
then
 exactly 10
percentpercents
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per cent
 by the end of the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words specialist, grammar, schools, year, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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