The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram gives information about how
bricks
are manufactured for the building industry.
Overall
, there are 7 stages in this
diagram where cray is diggered
from the land and prepared Correct your spelling
triggered
bricks
are delivered to the building industry.
The fist
step is that Correct your spelling
first
clay
is diggered
a digger machine, Correct your spelling
triggered
then
clay
is passed through the metal grid to roller
. In Correct article usage
a roller
this
process metal grid passes only small size
Correct your spelling
small-sized
clay
. After that, sand and water are added the
Change preposition
to the
clay
. Following
this
, the mixture is either kept in a mould or cut in a wire cutter to make the raw shape of the bricks
, then
raw bricks
are put in a drying over
for 24-48 hours. Correct your spelling
oven
Subsequently
, bricks
are kept in kilns at different temperatures. At the first kiln
temperature is 200 C- Add a comma
kiln,
980C
. At the Correct your spelling
980 C
last
kiln is 870C- 1300C, then
sends
to Wrong verb form
sent
cooling
chamber for 48-72 hours before they are Add an article
the cooling
packeged
. The Correct your spelling
packaged
last
step is prepared
Correct word choice
that prepared
bricks
are delivered to the building industry.Submitted by dnm.best on
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