The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram gives information about how
bricks
are manufactured for the building industry.
Overall
, there are 7 stages in
this
diagram where cray is
diggered
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triggered
from the land and prepared
bricks
are delivered to the building industry. The
fist
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first
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step is that
clay
is
diggered
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triggered
a digger machine,
then
clay
is passed through the metal grid to
roller
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a roller
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. In
this
process metal grid passes only
small size
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small-sized
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clay
. After that, sand and water are added
the
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clay
.
Following
this
, the mixture is either kept in a mould or cut in a wire cutter to make the raw shape of the
bricks
,
then
raw
bricks
are put in a drying
over
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oven
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for 24-48 hours.
Subsequently
,
bricks
are kept in kilns at different temperatures. At the first
kiln
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kiln,
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temperature is 200 C-
980C
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980 C
. At the
last
kiln is 870C- 1300C,
then
sends
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to
cooling
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the cooling
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chamber for 48-72 hours before they are
packeged
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packaged
. The
last
step is
prepared
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that prepared
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bricks
are delivered to the building industry.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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