The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.
The Bar Chart illustrates
car
use
numbers in 5 European
countries
per 1000 people in three years and also
shows the comparison with European
averages. The overall
Car
use
in European
countries
fluctuate and not much significant changes shown
in all 5 Add a missing verb
were shown
countries
in 10 years from 2005 to 2015.
To begin
, the car
uses the growth pattern of 5 countries
that are not similar in a specific time period. In 2015 car
use
average was greater than in 2005 and 2009. But among the 5 countries
, only 1 country
used number
increases in 2015 and 1 country
used numbers unchanged. In addition
, other
all 3 Correct word choice
apply
countries
reduced the car
use
number
to compare previous
state of 2009. Change the article
the previous
Therefore
from 2005 to 2009, 2 countries
Change noun form
countries'
country's
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car
uses
Change the verb form
use
number
increased and 2 countries
decreased and 1 had a steady state condition.
In the subsequent, the number
of car
uses are
Change the verb form
is
also
not similar. Only one country
is upper than the average value, one is almost near and all of the other three are below the average. Country
1 car
uses number
below 400 and Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
country
5 ranging from 800 to 1000 car
uses per 1000 people.
Car
use
in European
countries
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
are
not too much and different uses in different Correct subject-verb agreement
is
countries
were
shown in all 5 Change the verb form
was
countries
in 10 years from 2005 to 2015.Submitted by jonahid.stu20ju on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, use, european, countries, country, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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