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The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.

The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.
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The Bar Chart illustrates
car
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use
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 numbers in 5
European
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countries
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 per 1000 people in three years and
also
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 shows the comparison with
European
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 averages. The
overall
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Car
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use
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 in
European
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countries
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 fluctuate and not much significant changes
shown
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were shown
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 in all 5
countries
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 in 10 years from 2005 to 2015.
To begin
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, the
car
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 uses the growth pattern of 5
countries
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 that are not similar in a specific time period. In 2015
car
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use
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 average was greater than in 2005 and 2009. But among the 5
countries
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, only 1
country
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 used
number
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 increases in 2015 and 1
country
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 used numbers unchanged.
In addition
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,
other
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apply
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all 3
countries
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 reduced the
car
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use
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number
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 to compare
previous
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the previous
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 state of 2009.
Therefore
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 from 2005 to 2009, 2
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countries
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countries'
country's
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cars
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car
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uses
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use
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number
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 increased and 2
countries
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 decreased and 1 had a steady state condition. In the subsequent, the
number
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 of
car
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 uses
are
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is
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also
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 not similar. Only one
country
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 is upper than the average value, one is almost near and all of the other three are below the average.
Country
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 1
car
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 uses
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number
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numbers
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 below 400 and
country
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 5 ranging from 800 to 1000
car
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 uses per 1000 people.
Car
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use
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 in
European
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countries
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Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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are
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is
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 not too much and different uses in different
countries
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were
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was
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 shown in all 5
countries
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 in 10 years from 2005 to 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, use, european, countries, country, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Average
  • Comparison
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Dip
  • Outperform
  • Lag behind
  • Demographic factors
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Mobility demand
  • Environmental concerns
  • Policy implications
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