The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.

The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.
The Bar Chart illustrates
car
use
numbers in 5
European
countries
per 1000 people in three years and
also
shows the comparison with
European
averages. The
overall
Car
use
in
European
countries
fluctuate and not much significant changes
shown
Add a missing verb
were shown
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in all 5
countries
in 10 years from 2005 to 2015.
To begin
, the
car
uses the growth pattern of 5
countries
that are not similar in a specific time period. In 2015
car
use
average was greater than in 2005 and 2009. But among the 5
countries
, only 1
country
used
number
increases in 2015 and 1
country
used numbers unchanged.
In addition
,
other
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all 3
countries
reduced the
car
use
number
to compare
previous
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the previous
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state of 2009.
Therefore
from 2005 to 2009, 2
countries
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countries'
country's
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cars
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car
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uses
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use
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number
increased and 2
countries
decreased and 1 had a steady state condition. In the subsequent, the
number
of
car
uses
are
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is
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also
not similar. Only one
country
is upper than the average value, one is almost near and all of the other three are below the average.
Country
1
car
uses
number
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numbers
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below 400 and
country
5 ranging from 800 to 1000
car
uses per 1000 people.
Car
use
in
European
countries
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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not too much and different uses in different
countries
were
Change the verb form
was
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shown in all 5
countries
in 10 years from 2005 to 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, use, european, countries, country, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Average
  • Comparison
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Dip
  • Outperform
  • Lag behind
  • Demographic factors
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Mobility demand
  • Environmental concerns
  • Policy implications
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