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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of people that don't manage the capacity of reading around the world in the
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 year.
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, it gives us information about the region and the gender of
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 population.
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, it can be argued that females represent the biggest
percentage
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 in each region if compared with males.
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,
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 tendency is more frequent in
countries
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 like Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia. Focusing more on details, in these three
countries
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 mentioned before, illiteracy is quite elevated with a
percentage
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 that goes around 30% for men and around 50% for women.
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, more than 10% of people are illiterate in
countries
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 like Latin America and the Caribbean. Almost the same happens in East Asia and Oceania with a
percentage
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 of 10% for men and 20% for women.
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, illiteracy is almost impossible to find in Developed
Countries
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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