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Government should spend miney money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#government #miney #money #railways #roads
Nowadays, politicians are believed that investing in
line
 is better than roads. Some people claim that travelling by train is boring and lately. Other people believe that railways are cheaper, more effort and their cost of maintenance
is
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 much less than
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a harbor
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harbor
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. Both views are discussed in order before a detailed conclusion. We use different types of ways of travelling and each of them has some benefits and harms for us. One of the best ways
for
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 transport is
rail
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line
. But some
population
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 are said always
due to
 moving in a straight
line
 always is boring.
Also
 because we cannot cross cities, we miss the chance to see nature on special species.
Also
 If
track
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 were destroyed, it would be dangerous and trains might go out of their
line
. But it seems these
community
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 do not consider the problems of
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the harbor
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harbor
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. In our world, we face many problems and dangers. One of which is the road. The government should spend more money on maintaining the wharf.
On the other hand
,
track
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cost
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 less than
harbor
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Furthermore
, in some ,ways trains are faster than vehicles because the rail
line
are
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 straight.
Also
, the equipment for the maintenance of
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the harbor
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harbor
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 is more expensive but quicker. In General, I think governments should spend more money to maintain and extend rail
line
 because it is more effort than repairing the
harbor
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 every month.
Also
 traveling by train is much safer than vehicles.
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