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Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work?

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A glance at the table provided reveals the breakdown of temperatures and sunlight duration in two cities during the weekends,
temperature
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Temperature
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 is measured in
celsius
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Celsius
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, in
may
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May
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 2007
Overall
, Despite having higher temperatures than those of
Moscow
,
Mumbai
 has
shorter
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a shorter
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day
 duration than
Moscow
. In terms of
temperature
, regarding
Mumbai
, the
temperature
 margin is small. Saturday is the hottest
day
 among 3 days
in
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at
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 the weekend with 35
celsius
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Celsius
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 maximum and 29
celsius
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Celsius
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 minimum.
Although
minimum
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the minimum
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temperature
 stays the same during the weekends,
maximum
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the maximum
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 is highest
with
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at
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 35
celsius
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Celsius
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. With respect to
Moscow
,
range
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the range
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 of
temperature
 of the city is greatly erratic, saturday is the
day
 with
highest
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the highest
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temperature
 with 10
celsius
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Celsius
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 maximum and 9
celsius
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Celsius
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 minimum,
while
in
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on
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friday
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Friday
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 and
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Sunday
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sunday
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,sunday
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 the maximum
temperature
 is twice and thrice times as much as
minimum
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the minimum
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, despite being the hottest
day
 in the weekend its
temperature
 margin is the smallest. With regards to
period
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the period
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 of daytime in
two
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the two
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 cities,
Mumbai
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Mumbai's
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 sun shines for 10 hours
while
 that in
Moscow
 is 18 which is much longer .
While
sun
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the sun
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 in
Mumbai
 shines at exactly 6am and sets at around 4 pm,
Moscow
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in Moscow
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 the
day
 starts at about 5 am and ends at around 10pm
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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