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There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: describe what the problem with the changing rooms is say what happened the last times you complained explain what you want the manager to do. Write about 150 words.

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Respected manager, I am a resident of Richmond Hill and a frequent visitor
of
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 the
sport
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sports
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 centre on Torbram
road
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Road
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. Gyming has been my passion since
teenage
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my teenage
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 years but good facilities are essential for a better workout which the centre has failed to provide under your management. I have complained several times about the lack of water supply in the men's changing room.
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, a written application was given to the receptionist by the gym members. We all were assured of a positive response but no
further
 action has been taken. Water supply should be fixed as most of the office going people usually take a bath in
gym
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the gym
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 in morning hours as it is convenient for them. A plumber can be assigned to look into
this
 matter as the reputation of the branch can be at stake
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 if corrective matters are not taken timely.
Your
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 sincerely, Harshveer
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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