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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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Recently the issue that has been brought into focus is constant traffic jams. It is generally believed that
car
 ownership has increased more rapidly than thirty years ago. In
this
 essay, I will take some factors to comment
this
 statement. No one can deny the fact that the congestion in the big cities is rising. Part of the explanation lies in the price being cheaper than in the past or
people
 wanting
car
 ownership when they work far from the house.
For instance
, some
people
 in Vietnam are really into buying
cars
.
By contrast
, if traffic congestion decreases, the pollution environment will be reduced.
Therefore
, it is important to raise awareness of
people
 about it.
Apart from
this
, another aspect is that the government might improve the transport structure to cover all areas of the city can increase commuters can use the public system. The immediate result it produces is to increase the number of rides during rush hour and have
less
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 drivers on the road. Nothing could be more apparent than the evidence that in Vietnam
people
 are using public transport more than in the past.
On the other hand
, if everyone does not use
cars
, the
car
 company will go bankrupt . It is necessary that effective measures should be taken to reduce the number of
cars
 on the road. From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that the growth of
car
 owners is
giving
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 many problems. It might be time to encourage
people
 to try to be mindful
about
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of
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 how much they use their
cars
 in order to minimize as much as possible the amount of traffic and pollution.
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