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A glance at the provided diagram reveals the process of movement of water cycle of the Earth.

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A glance at the provided diagram reveals the process of movement of
water
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 cycle of the Earth.
To sum up
, it can be seen that the movement of
water
 works in two ways,
such
 as above and below the Earth's surface. First of all, beginning at the evaporation stage,
the
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80
percent
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 of
water
 vapour in the air comes from the ocean. After that, it condensed in clouds by causing heat from the Sun.
Therefore
, during the next stages rain or snow falls from the formed clouds and can be seen as
a
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precipitation in the diagram.
Therefore
, the rains or snows fall down to lakes and return to the ocean by surface runoff.
Moreover
, the
water
go
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 down with
ground
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 and
reached
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to
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the impervious layer.
However
, the
salt
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saltwater
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water
 intrusion process takes place before entering the ocean.
Then
, after finishing all steps these cycles of movement of
water
 repeated again.
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