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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is learning a foreign language at school. It is undeniable that learning languages become an essential part of our life

#language #school #languages #part #life
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is learning a foreign
language
 at
school
. It is undeniable that learning languages become an essential part of our
life
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However
, there is no absolute agreement as some people find
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learning a foreign at
school
 rather than secondary
school
 beneficial,
while
 others
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 with that statement negatively. Surely, there are both pros and cons to foreign
language
 but
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 believe advantages outweigh disadvantages. One of the main positives of learning
language
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 at primary
school
 is that kids better perceive
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foreign lectures
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rather
 than
secondary
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in secondary
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school
.
For instance
,
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scientist
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article
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they
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say that kindergarten showed
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the excellent
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result
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results
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of
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 foreign
language
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languages
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. The group was divided by different ages, kindergarten and
teen-agers
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. They had a few lessons and
at the end
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Due to
 the
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 they nominated results which
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illustrated kindergarten had high
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 in comparison with
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teenagers
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. Another advantage is that kids
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 communicate with international students
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 early age
that is
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 improves the
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 outlook. A good example here is exchange programs with
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foreign schools in the good relationship. Children can get on well with each other and advance themselves
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in speaking
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. Turning to the other side of the argument,
young
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 generation loads
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 brains. One clear example is
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 system of China the most loaded system. From
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childhood
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 high competition which puts
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students
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 in a difficult position. Since
this
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student
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students
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 can't cope with that
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. Another
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major
 disadvantage is in defined circumstances child can not understand why he is learning
this
 subject.
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,
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 to say why
he's
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 subject is important, as a child can't argue with the teacher and keep
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 the subject. In that case, not mastered
lesson
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 and
ignorance
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are ignorance
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how
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 to
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. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that it is important to teach children a foreign
language
 but you should observe some conditions to improve
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 of lessons
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