Topic: Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

One
of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the
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to concentrate
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of concentrating
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at school. It is undeniable that difficulties
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in concentrating
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has become an essential part of our life.
However
, these days there are certain steps schools and universities can
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to improve
students
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concentration
.
One
of the main aspects of the
problem
is that
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can keep
students
from distracting themselves is in fact, the system
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to
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pupils.
One
of the main reasons behind
that is
the methods of teaching when a lot of
students
just closed in
one
cabinet
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at
one
desk leaves no
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space
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for individualities.
This
could lead to reducing the level of
concentration
for the
students
which is
also
might result in the effectiveness of the teaching ways from the bad side. To tackle
this
problem
people should build
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schools with
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large amount of space or
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provide
an online lectures
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where pupils would be able to watch lessons as many times as needed with enough space.
This
may be the least complex and so the best way to improve the effectiveness and increase the
students
'
concentration
. Having weighed everything mentioned
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, we can come to
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conclusion that there are many options to solve the
problem
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decreasing the
concentration
level
within
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students
. So it would not be surprising to see some improvements in the near future. Actions must be taken urgently,
otherwise
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we will get an even worse situation with the
problem
of decreasing the level of
concentration
at school.
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