The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
City
Correct article usage
The city
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hospital is located at Ring
Road
. In 2007 the
road
access
was small and the
car
park
for staff and
public
Correct article usage
the public
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was in the same area. Because of that, there was not much space for
public
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the public
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to
park
their
car
there. If you wanted to go there by
bus
, there were 6
bus
stops near the city hospital, but the
bus
had to stop in the middle of the
road
, so it blocked the
car
access
to the hospital. But in the past three years, the
access
to the city hospital has improved so much. The staff
car
park
and the public
car
park
were separated, so there was more space for the public to
park
their
car
. The staff
car
park
was located on the south part
while
the public
car
park
was located on the east part. They
also
added a bigger
bus
station next to the
road
so it won’t block the
car
access
to the hospital. The
bus
could go to the
bus
station through the roundabout.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, access, car, park, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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