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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate how different industry sectors will project
to
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the
production
 in the world
percentagewise
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percentage
 in the years 2040 and 2060.
Overall
, at the beginning of the
period
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 Materials will be projected the least to
the
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production
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least production
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 in the world,
while
 Services will be the most significant
production
 sector. In comparison,
at the end
 of the
period
 Service and Manufacturing will keep the largest
production
 segment and the lowest
production
 will be made by Agriculture. Services sector will account for 40% in 2040, and will be kept the
lagest
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largest
 segment, which will increase 1% in 2060. The second biggest sector Manufacturing
also
 is 31% in the year 2040 and
then
 slightly going up to 33%
at the end
 of year. Info-Com Tech can be seen 15% at the
biginning
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beginning
 of the
period
, will climb just 1%, with a 16% in 2060.
Marterials
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Materials
, which will comprise
small
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the
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 number of global's
production
 in 2040, increase by just 1% in 2060. In 2040
production
will
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 output from
Energy
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the Energy
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 and Agriculture sectors were at 7% and 4%, respectively, and both will
decreased
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decrease
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 by 5% and 1% each after
20-year
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a 20-year
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period
.
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