Obesity is now a major global epidemic. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?
Obesity is
one
of the health Use synonyms
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problem
that massively increased recently Change to a plural noun
problems
due to
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caused
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causes
that
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apply
related
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relate
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to people
people
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people's
habit
or Fix the agreement mistake
habits
behavior
. Even Change the spelling
behaviour
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this
has been Correct word choice
though this
worldwide
epidemic Correct article usage
a worldwide
problem
, Use synonyms
however
, it still could be done through some actions and the elaboration to solve Linking Words
this
matter will be covered in Linking Words
this
essay.
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Firstly
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one
of Use synonyms
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the reason
reason
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reasons
people
could get over-weight is Use synonyms
they
lack of activities and it Correct pronoun usage
their
highly
possible Add a missing verb
is highly
happen
to Fix the infinitive
to happen
people
who work in the office and seldom Use synonyms
to
do a workout. Fix the infinitive
apply
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, it could happen because of their bad habit, Linking Words
for instance
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late night
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late-night
dinner
. Fix the agreement mistake
dinners
Hence
, these circumstances are the main reasons for Linking Words
people
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get
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become
obesity
. Meanwhile, there Replace the word
obese
are
some research that Change the verb form
is
prove
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proves
this
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problem
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also
hereditary, and Linking Words
this
remains be more complicated to tackle Linking Words
this
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problem
.
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this
challenge could Linking Words
be happen
towards every Change the verb form
happen
Use synonyms
people
, Fix the agreement mistake
person
but
there are some practices or solutions to tackle Correct word choice
apply
this
. Linking Words
One
of which is Use synonyms
people
have to be active. Active refers to how often and how long a person Use synonyms
do
walking. Research Change the verb form
does
said
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says
people
have to walk at least 1,000 steps in a day. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
have to do exercise 2 times Use synonyms
in
a week. Change preposition
apply
This
activity could Linking Words
generates
body flexibility Change the verb form
generate
as well as
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enhances
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enhance
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people
cardio. In spite of these, Change noun form
people's
people
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also
have to control their food, because some of them Linking Words
are consist
of a lot of sugar, Change the verb form
consist
carbo
, and Correct your spelling
carbs
also
junk food.
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To conclude
, obesity is Linking Words
one
of Use synonyms
epidemic
health Correct article usage
the epidemic
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problem
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problems
in
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apply
global
, and it could be worse Change the word
globally
on
the body if Change preposition
for
people
ignore Use synonyms
this
. Linking Words
However
, Linking Words
this
is still Linking Words
cureable
and preventable as long as Correct your spelling
curable
people
keep their good Use synonyms
habit
.Fix the agreement mistake
habits
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