The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
been shut down.
In 2011, there
are
8.500 new Wrong verb form
were
shops
that are
just newly introduced. Moving to 2012, Wrong verb form
were
stores
that are just open in the area drastically lower compared in
Change preposition
to
the
2011, around 4.000 Change the article
apply
stores
. In 2013, in difference of 1.000 new shops
are
introduced, making it 5.000 Wrong verb form
were
shops
in that year
. Moving forward to 2014, around 6.001 are making their grand opening in the country. Thus
increases the number
of new shops
compared to 2014. Reaching the year
2015, there are
slightly a decreasing Wrong verb form
was
number
of new stores
for about 4.000
Correct your spelling
4,000
stores
in the area. This
goes on until the year
2017. In 2018, there are a less number
of stores
that are
opening, around 3.000 in that Verb problem
apply
year
.
However
, there are also
shops
that are closing in between these new opening shops
. In 2011, the number
or
Correct your spelling
of
stores
that are closed are
around 6.002. It Correct subject-verb agreement
is
decrease
2 Wrong verb form
decreased
shops
, make
it 6.000 Wrong verb form
making
stores
that close
down in the following Wrong verb form
closed
year
which is 2012. Moving to 2013, there are a slightly number
of 7.001 shops
that are
shut down. Wrong verb form
were
Comparing
to 2011, there is only 1 different Wrong verb form
Compared
number
of stores
that are closed down in 2014, which make it 6.001 shops
. In 2015 however
, there’re
only around 9.000 Wrong verb form
there were
stores
that are
closed Wrong verb form
were
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
from
2011 until 2018. It going up again to the Change preposition
to
number
of 5.001 shops
that are
closed in 2016. In 2017, Wrong verb form
were
there’re
a Wrong verb form
there was
slightly
1 Change the word
slight
number
in
Change preposition
of
difference
from 2016 Fix the agreement mistake
differences
shops
that are
closed in 2017. Unnecessary verb
apply
Then
in 2018, it become
6.001 Wrong verb form
became
shops
that are
closed down same as the Wrong verb form
were
number
of shops
that are
shut down in 2016.
Wrong verb form
were
This
conclude
that there’s a bigger Change the verb form
concludes
number
of stores
that closed in the year
of 2011 until 2018 compared to the number
of shops
that are just openedSubmitted by lydiaia on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, stores, year, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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