The maps below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particular university

The maps below show the future plan about the Biology School in a particular university
The maps reveal information on different changes in the layout of a Biology
school
in a university as it is now and
it
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will be in the future. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is obvious that most features of the
school
will alter. The main alterations will be the transformation and relocation of facilities making the
school
more modern and flexible in various
way
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. With regard to the north of the picture, the
school
is
planned
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to place a lab and an office in the middle of the north, which will be surrounded by some trees.
While
the
the
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indoor
sport
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hall in the northeast, the road in the west, and the central library
remain
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at
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the same spots, the drama
center
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on the right of the aforementioned library will be substituted by a music
center
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. Turning to the south of the picture, a new car parking lot for staff will
locate
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in the southwest which is next to the end
the
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road. Extra teaching building and lecture room will be built which is predicted to be two of each kind.
While
the former is on the left of the cafe, the latter is on another side.
Finally
, the IT
center
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below the cafe in the southeast will be expanded to the left.
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