The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The first graph shows the percentage of households with electrical equipment
such
as washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners from 1920 to 2019 in a single nation
while
the second chart depicts the work that has been done per hour per week. As shown, the proportion of
everyday
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for all the appliances have been increased between the first two decades;
whereas
the number of
hours
per week dropped down with a steady slope from 50
hours
to almost 35
hours
.
In addition
, the rate of development of the rate of ordinary
for
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refrigerators and vacuum cleaners after 1960
has
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decreased
while
for washing machines rather than rising up, it went down from 1960 to 1980.
On the other hand
, the number of
hours
per week per household was nearly constant with a little drop between 1960 to 2019.
Lastly
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last
, the percentage of households for refrigerator and vacuum cleaner after 1980 their trend tend to be constant;
however
,
this
trend for washing machine has risen.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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