The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

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the ratio of families in owned and rented houses accommodation in Wales and England from 1918 to 2011.

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both countries have contrary data in each

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except in 1971.

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22%, the number after 21

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respectively, in 1961 the number graduate increased to 41% in general number regularly increased in all period till eventually his peak in 2001 to 69 per cent. in rented accommodation about households started to decrease from 77% in 1918 to 31% in 2001 respectively after that in 2011

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relation between both figures, people in recent

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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their childen themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

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in many part of the world, children and teenagers are spending more and more of their time indoors. what do you think are causes of this problem? what measures could best be taken to solve it?