The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.
The bar graph
illustrate
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the performance of a bus company with regards to their punctuality, both actual and goal, and the number of complaints and passengers.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that the company lowered their standard percentage throughout the given
period
,
whereas
the complaints within the given
period
increases
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. On the one hand, it is noticeable that the company's target percentage slowly
decreases
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from 86% in 1999 and became under 85% in 2003,
moreover
the actual figure
off
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services arriving on time
experience
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a fluctuation. In 1999 the portion was 85%
,
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before a gradual dropped by at least 82% in 2000.
However
,
on
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the following year it significantly
increases
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, but hovered at the same level until the end
period
in 2003 at just under 85%
On the other hand
, the number of complaints (per thousand passenger's journeys) continued to increase within the
4 year
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period
. In 1999, it was only around under 80 people, before reaching its highest point by 2003 at 120, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punctuality
  • target versus actual performance
  • correlation
  • consistency
  • trends
  • passenger numbers
  • complaints
  • assessment
  • measures taken
  • impact
  • effectiveness
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