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Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? #schools #children #subjects #future #careers #music #sports

#schools #children #subjects #future #careers #music #sports
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Well, Some
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 Studying specific or accurate sciences is helpful,
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 Being of
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 and sports is not profitable.
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 my mind, Doing sports and listening, to singing songs leads or provide to become healthy life and a bright future.
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, Different
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 have different ideas about
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 . Someone's view is that Only being clear subjects will bring to the peak of luck. Currently, A knowledgeable person is able to achieve high achievements,
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 his or her field. If
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 am going to give an example about a doctor, For
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acquiring
 doctor,
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 they need to learn a lot.
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 as, to become a doctor, my aunt learned more and more. But, she
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 limited only to
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 branch, she is not into doing sports.
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, with sport and
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people
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 can go back to
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life, There are many useful sides
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 carrying out these activities. Provide
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health
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raise our mood and assist in getting rid of some stress, when we perform these exercises. On the other
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, Some brightness will be gathered with us,
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, we can take some pleasure,
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 in sport, and
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, I regularly sing different types of songs and I run out of the street on a basic, Mainly, Into the time, my mood changes to be fine.
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, all my sorrows will wiped by listening and singing
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, For living better, the more our branches are extended and follow these rules, the more we can build healthy
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, All things are needful for humans.
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