Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? #schools #children #subjects #future #careers #music #sports

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Studying specific or accurate sciences is helpful,

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Being of

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my mind, Doing sports and listening, to singing songs leads or provide to become healthy life and a bright future.

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they need to learn a lot.

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as, to become a doctor, my aunt learned more and more. But, she

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limited only to

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life, There are many useful sides

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carrying out these activities. Provide

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health

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raise our mood and assist in getting rid of some stress, when we perform these exercises. On the other

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, Some brightness will be gathered with us,

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in sport, and

music

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, I regularly sing different types of songs and I run out of the street on a basic, Mainly, Into the time, my mood changes to be fine.

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, all my sorrows will wiped by listening and singing

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, All things are needful for humans.