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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter: •Describe the situation • Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • Say what kind of accommodation you would prefer Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My purpose for
this
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 writing is to let you know about the situation in which I am involved. I am currently living in a college, sharing a
room
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 with another student, who is making my stay here uncomfortable with her
behavior
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behaviour
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. The problem is that It’s a challenge for me to focus on my studies or concentrate
in
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on
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 the things I must do. He is always
making
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having
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 huge parties in our
room
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, turning up the
tv
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TV
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 volume or even
though
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apply
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calling his relatives or friends speaking in
loud
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a loud
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 voice.
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,
in
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several times I have tried to speak with him to try to reach an understanding but he doesn’t want to change.
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, he used to
answer
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tell
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 me
that
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is
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it was
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also
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 his
room
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.
Therefore
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, to be honest, I don’t know what else I should do to fix the situation. Given the situation I am
right
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in right
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now
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,now
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 I would deeply appreciate it if you could change my accommodation for a single one. I must move on and study hard for all my final exams and prepare my final thesis. It will be convenient for me if I stay in a single
room
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 next term,
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otherwise
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,otherwise
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 I would like to stay with a close friend I have in the residence. I would appreciate your immediate attention to
this
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 matter.I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Anabel

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Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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