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Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #claims #waste #homes #governments #requirement #laws #reason
Nowadays, waste is the main reason
make
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making
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environment
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the environment
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 polluted, almost
individuals
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all individuals
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are
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have
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 already recycled their dumps to help the atmosphere
cleaner
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be cleaner
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.
However
, that can not solve
this
 problem at
the
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apply
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present. I agree with the statement that
government
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the government
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 should make recycling
to
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apply
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be important
rules
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rule
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 to make everyone know the
benefit
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benefits
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it’s bringing for
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it brings
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. The law is roles
a
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apply
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necessary in solving
trouble
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the trouble
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. It can be understood the
government
 know how important the problem is and all of
inhabitant
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the inhabitant
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 need to require and do it seriously.
For instance
, the
government
 need to create more laws to make people
do recycled
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recycle
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 before
put
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putting them
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 in trash bin like
amount
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the amount
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kilograms
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of kilograms
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waste
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of waste
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equal
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and equal
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 amount of cash.
This
 is one of two
the
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apply
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reason
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reasons
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 why laws are needed for
government
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the government
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 to sustain the knowledge of
resident
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residents
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 about recycling.
Moreover
, it is easier to make decision
in
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to
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 punish
person
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a person
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 or company who do not require the laws. There will be no more discrimination in punishing that can make almost people
to
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apply
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do the right
behavior
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behaviour
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 when the
government
 active the law
for instance
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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