Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of smoking in public places
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has proliferated over
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few years.
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school
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of
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on
this
undisputed issue suggest a ban on
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notion, and a concrete answer is given below. It is extremely imperative to keep
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clean,
however
, some
people
choose to light a
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cigarette
in public places.
Firstly
, tobacco is a chemical which emits harmful fumes in fresh air when burnt.
Also
, a disturbing odour is left behind in surroundings which
people
inhale.
In other words
, passive-smoking is done when non-smokers breathe injurious fumes
emmited
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emitted
through
such
products leading to serious
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on
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body.
Secondly
, leftover
cigarretes
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cigarettes
are
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off
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in open
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surroundings
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an increase in Global waste. A good illustration of
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is, a recent survey conducted by "
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Waste Management Institute"
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a hike in undisposable substances by 1.13% every year which leads to Global Warming.
E-cigarretes
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E-cigarettes
have
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captured a vast market
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nowadays.
In addition
,
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vaping
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has become common
in
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among
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youths and
people
smoke it irrespective of their age.
This
has a direct impact on
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the respiratory
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systems of teenagers.
People
smoking
this
attractive device in public influence non-smokers and they land up in
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category.
According to
a recent study by "
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Institute" sales of vapes
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burgeoned by 23%
since
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last
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two years, and
this
trend will
potentionally
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potentially
increase in future.
To conclude
, it is a contentious topic,
however
, some corrective measures
such
as building smoking places in public areas
to
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smokers can help control
this
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