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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world today. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is replacing fossil fuels. Is this a positive or negative development?

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These days, some states
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 from using fossil
fuels
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 which are the main
sources
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 of
energy
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 to other
sources
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 of
energy
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,
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, solar, wind and electric
energy
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. I strongly believe that it is a positive
development
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overall
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. Using alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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 is
positive
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a positive
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development
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 , it will be beneficial to our environment. Utilizing renewable
energy
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instead
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 of fossil
fuels
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 will reduce
impacts
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the impacts
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 of fossil
fuels
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 as the pollution from fossil
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 damages the ecosystem of all animals.
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 concern was raised by many environmentalists and we obviously see that the temperature of our world is continually increasing .
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, in the future, fossil
fuels
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 may not be enough to serve our consumption. Preparing to seek sustainable
energy
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 resources will be better .
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it
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 may
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 some negative
development
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 of using other
energy
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sources
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, I believe that they are negligible and can be addressed easily. People who change to use alternative
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 of
energy
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 would pay an extra cost.
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, switching to electrical car models from conventional car models.
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, the governments need to spend a huge amount of budget on research for the possibility and processing
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 green
sources
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 of
energy
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 to
ready to use
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ready-to-use
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energy
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.
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, In
long
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the long
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 run, most green
energy
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sources
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 have less cost than fossil
fuels
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 and benefit our environment as a whole. In conclusion, I truly believe that changing to utilize alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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,
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, renewable or sustainable
energy
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, will be a positive
development
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.
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 there are some concerns, they are negligible and can be addressed easily.
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