The diagram below shows how cheese is made. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows how cheese is made.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
The drawing illustrates the multi-
step
process
of cheese products.
Overall
, there are nine steps in the
process
of making cheese starting with the combination of raw milk and bacteria and ending with packed cheese being stored in supermarkets and shop shelves.
This
process
begins by putting raw milk inside a huge metal container containing bacteria, after which the mixture becomes acidic and through
this
,
process
T enzymes are formed. Followed by the solidification of the product forming it into curds, and
then
curds are cut into small pieces.
Following
this
, the curds are placed inside a pot to be cooked before draining it with excess water.
After
this
step
, salt is added and passed onto the machine for shaping.
Following
this
step
, the product enters a shelve where they are processed for about 2 months.
After
this
step
step
is completed they are sent to be packaged, after which they are ready to be placed in supermarkets and shops.
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