A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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Hello Mr. John, My name is Kulwinder Kaur writing

this

letter in regards to express my point of view regarding the sponsorship of two different events.

Hence

, I will discuss the detriment of both events and will present my point of view. First of all, sponsoring the sports team for children not only helps the community to get good players in the upcoming time but

also

encourages leadership qualities among the young generation.

Additionally

, it will boost the confidence among kids to achieve their realistic goals

as well as

their mental health. If we consider the sponsorship of open-air concerts twice, it has its own advantages.

For example

, it will help our community to take a break from their daily tasks or work schedule to improve their mental stability.

Moreover

, it is an excellent form of entertainment and art, which boosts our energy as well. In the end, I think it is considerable to spend money on two open-air concerts as it will really improve the mental health of the community. Your sincere Kulwinder Kaur

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