In many countries, the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think is and what can be done about it?
Crime
has been a major problem in today's world, with Use synonyms
crime
rates increasing every year, Use synonyms
as well as
the violent actions that take place Linking Words
while
committing an Linking Words
offense
to the public. There has been countless debates and action on how to minimize the Change the spelling
offence
crime
rates, Use synonyms
however
so far those Linking Words
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work
so well. I myself would despise when someone commits a felony and in Wrong verb form
worked
this
written essay, I will share my opinion on how to minimize Linking Words
crime
rates.
To start off with, I believe that the majority of perpetrators come with three elements that are either from poor family households, low Use synonyms
education
, and outcast Use synonyms
people
. As time goes by, countries all around the world will develop, which could be that more Use synonyms
people
are required to work more, they are demanded more from Use synonyms
society
which Use synonyms
people
who come from poor families will most likely not be able to survive in the modern era. Use synonyms
This
will lead them to do anything for them to survive which comes at a high cost. Linking Words
As well as
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people
who are uneducated, since Use synonyms
society
is evolving and developing, Use synonyms
society
needs highly educated Use synonyms
people
which leads more schools to be constructed, Use synonyms
however
those who come from a poor family won't be able to afford an Linking Words
education
, and without proper Use synonyms
education
, with no skills or Use synonyms
knowledge
they are not needed. Add a comma
,knowledge
Lastly
, the Linking Words
people
who aren’t performing Use synonyms
good
enough, their skills and knowledge get Change the word
well
out performed
by others leads them to be Correct your spelling
outperformed
outcast
, Fix the agreement mistake
outcasts
which
they will do anything for attention whether it can be doing stupid things, or committing crimes.
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and
Although
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,
there have been countless attempts to Remove the comma
apply
lower
these situations from happening, I believe there should be more to be implemented. One idea that instantly pops up in my head is reducing the price Verb problem
prevent
for
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of
an
Remove the article
apply
education
, by reducing the price more families will be able to afford Use synonyms
such
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education
, Use synonyms
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however
there Add a comma
,however
has
been countless debates where many Change the verb form
have
people
debate that Use synonyms
education
should be free. I can somehow relate to Use synonyms
this
idea, Linking Words
however
, as a business student school is Linking Words
also
a business just as any other Linking Words
businesses
, with Fix the agreement mistake
business
education
being free they will not Use synonyms
last
. Since performing is very important in today's Linking Words
society
, yet some Use synonyms
people
just Use synonyms
couldn't
keep up, Wrong verb form
can't
therefor
an idea which Rephrase
apply
come
to mind Change the verb form
comes
that
governments should make a system where those who can't perform well in their field, Add a missing verb
is that
they
can switch their industry or field, have a tryout for one-month maximum to see whether they perform well and if they do, they will be hired. Correct pronoun usage
apply
People
's mental health has been getting worse ever since the 21st century, especially the outcast Use synonyms
people
. There is no clear or precise action to help with Use synonyms
this
rather than therapyLinking Words
,
since therapy is very expensive. What the government can do is to make therapy free for a month, Remove the comma
apply
this
can reduce a person's level of stress and anxiety by a margin. The simplest way and easiest is Linking Words
that
the government can enforce the law more strictly than before.
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for
To conclude
my writing, there is no perfect plan for anything, we are living in a competitive world which has been ever since humans were brought to earth. As for myself, I believe those are just excuses to do Linking Words
such
things.Linking Words
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