The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.
The provided chart shows the youngsters’ fast-food
consumptions
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consumption
in
particular
area, Add an article
a particular
Mauritus
, between 1985 and 2015.
Correct your spelling
Mauritius
Overall
, the trends explain the changes of
meal preferences among teenagers Change preposition
in
time
to time, showing a significant decline in Pizza Change preposition
from time
while
hamburgers and fried chicken increased gradually over the period.
On one hand, the popularity of pizza dropped dramatically by
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apply
eaten
Wrong verb form
eating
at
just less than 10 Change preposition
apply
times
a year
in 2015 while
in 1985 reaching 60 times
a year
. However
, in the
2000, Change the article
apply
this
category of meal
Fix the agreement mistake
meals
experiencing
overlapping in the similar point of 2 other foods, reaching around 40 Wrong verb form
experienced
times
a year
.
In contrast
, the hamburgers rose significantly, reaching its peak at 70 times
a year
in 2015 while
the
fried chicken Correct article usage
apply
show
similar patterns, just above 60 Wrong verb form
showed
time
a Fix the agreement mistake
times
year
for both grops
. Correct your spelling
groups
crops
In addition
, between 1995 and 2000, the number of fried chicken
exceeded hamburgers before it Fix the agreement mistake
chickens
is
back to Verb problem
went
become
second place in 2015.Verb problem
apply
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