The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015.
The provided chart shows the youngsters’ fast-food
consumptions
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in
particular
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area,
Mauritus
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Mauritius
, between 1985 and 2015.
Overall
, the trends explain the changes
of
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meal preferences among teenagers
time
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from time
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to time, showing a significant decline in Pizza
while
hamburgers and fried chicken increased gradually over the period. On one hand, the popularity of pizza dropped dramatically
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eaten
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at
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just less than 10
times
a
year
in 2015
while
in 1985 reaching 60
times
a
year
.
However
, in
the
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2000,
this
category of
meal
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experiencing
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overlapping in the similar point of 2 other foods, reaching around 40
times
a
year
.
In contrast
, the hamburgers rose significantly, reaching its peak at 70
times
a
year
in 2015
while
the
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fried chicken
show
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similar patterns, just above 60
time
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times
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a
year
for both
grops
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groups
crops
.
In addition
, between 1995 and 2000, the number of fried
chicken
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chickens
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exceeded hamburgers before it
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went
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back to
become
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second place in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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