Topic: The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that looking at one's
phones
is Fix the agreement mistake
phone
antisocial
as smoking and so it is Rephrase
as antisocial
also
banned in certain places
. It is undeniable that smoking and wasting a
time by looking at Correct article usage
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phone
has become an essential part of our life. Correct article usage
a phone
However
, there is no absolute argument on whether both of them should be banned or limited at
some Change preposition
in
places
.
A commonly held belief is that even when person
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a person
surrounded
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is surrounded
with
a lot of friends, Change preposition
by
also
spends a
time Correct article usage
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by
using Change preposition
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phone
. As evidence of Add an article
the phone
a phone
this
they point to nowadays there is increasingly
concerning problem of technology consuming our daily lives, chiefly Correct article usage
an increasingly
within
kids and teenagers, and so I believe must be battled. Change preposition
among
Furthermore
, I think that people
should live at
the moment and not be preoccupied with their mobile Change preposition
in
phones
. Thus
, the idea of banning phones
in certain places
like clubs and restaurants can remind people
that life can not be lived through the pixels of a screen.
On the other hand
, some people
claim that smoking is inherently antisocial and I don't think that a complete ban on phones
is completely
good idea. Add an article
a completely
For example
, they may mention that people
have made acquaintances or even friends through smoking. In addition
, smokers go outside, away from most of the others, sharing
a cigarette with someone in Correct word choice
and sharing
this
quiet environment can be a good time to get to know someone. The explanation lies in the fact that phones
should not be fully banned but only strongly discouraged,
since they are Remove the comma
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predominant
means of Correct article usage
a predominant
communications
and extremely helpful in emergency situations. Fix the agreement mistake
communication
Therefore
, people
should not be looking at them constantly when they go out but they should still have access to their mobile in case they need to respond quickly.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that mobile phones
can be harmful in social interactions and certain places
should prohibit them, although
not to the point that they can not be accessed.Submitted by dnm.best on
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