Topic: The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that looking at one's
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is
antisocial
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as smoking and so it is
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banned in certain
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. It is undeniable that smoking and wasting
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time by looking at
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a phone
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has become an essential part of our life.
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, there is no absolute argument on whether both of them should be banned or limited
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some
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. A commonly held belief is that even when
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surrounded
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with
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a lot of friends,
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spends
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time
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using
phone
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the phone
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. As evidence of
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they point to nowadays there is
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concerning problem of technology consuming our daily lives, chiefly
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kids and teenagers, and so I believe must be battled.
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, I think that
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should live
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the moment and not be preoccupied with their mobile
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.
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, the idea of banning
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in certain
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like clubs and restaurants can remind
people
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that life can not be lived through the pixels of a screen.
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, some
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claim that smoking is inherently antisocial and I don't think that a complete ban on
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is
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good idea.
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, they may mention that
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have made acquaintances or even friends through smoking.
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, smokers go outside, away from most of the others,
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a cigarette with someone in
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quiet environment can be a good time to get to know someone. The explanation lies in the fact that
phones
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should not be fully banned but only strongly discouraged
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since they are
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means of
communications
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and extremely helpful in emergency situations.
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,
people
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should not be looking at them constantly when they go out but they should still have access to their mobile in case they need to respond quickly. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that mobile
phones
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can be harmful in social interactions and certain
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should prohibit them,
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not to the point that they can not be accessed.
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