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**In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. some people think that this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.**

#**in #countries #people #salaries #country #government #control #limit #amount
It is admittedly true that people want a luxurious lifestyle
that is
 why they
work
 hard to earn
money
. Some individuals believe the
government
 should control and limit the
amount
 of individuals'
money
. In my opinion, In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and extend my opinion. On the one hand, the standard of living improved rapidly,
thus
 becoming the sole reason to consider. Companies give enormous
money
 to
employees
 for their hard
work
 and for their overtime.
Good
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A good
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amount
 salary motivates
employees
 for their
work
 which is not only good for the
company
 but
also
 for the nation. For a successful example, A Bangladesh
company
 (The Prothom Alo) who are giving good
salary
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salaries
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 to their
employees
, the
company
also
 provides extra
money
 for
employees
 who are working overtime or
work
 hard.
As a result
, companies will benefit from
this
 stage and it is a win-win situation for a
company
.
On the other hand
, groups of people think the
government
 should control and limit the
amount
 of people's salaries which
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
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 several benefits.
For example
,
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the chinese
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chinese
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Chinese
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government
 should control salary
that is
 the reason
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the chinese
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chinese
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Chinese
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government
 provide good quality treatment,
low cost
Add a hyphen
low-cost
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 education or free,
Correct word choice
and create
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create
Wrong verb form
creating
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new
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a new
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 industry for citizen.
As a result
,
citizen
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citizens
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 are equal,
also
 they spend quality life
and
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apply
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day by day criminal activity will be zero.
To sum up
, a significant
amount
 of
money
 demotivates
employees
 for their
work
.
Good
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A good
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amount
 of
money
motivated
Wrong verb form
motivates
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employee which
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employees who
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 are developing a country.
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