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The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment in funds of four categories from 1988 to 2014.

The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment in funds of four categories from 1988 to 2014.
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The line graph displays the amount of money invested in four financial assets between 1988 and 2014, including real
estate
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,
gold
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, fine
art
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, and stock. Millions of US
dollars
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 are used as units of measurement. It is obvious that over the indicated period, all four investment fund categories increased. The one that increased the most dramatically was
gold
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. In 1988, about 50
million
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dollars
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 were spent on real
estate
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 and stock investments,
while
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 75
million
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dollars
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 were spent on fine
art
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, and 100
million
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dollars
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 were spent on
gold
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. The value of an investment in fine
art
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 fluctuated over the ensuing 18 years.
In contrast
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, there was a modest increase in real
estate
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 investment (about $100
million
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),
while
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 interest in company shares and
gold
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 increased significantly, with figures for both increasing to more than $200
million
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. From 2006 to 2014,
gold
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 was the most heavily invested asset, peaking at 450
million
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dollars
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 before falling. Fine
art
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 was
next,
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steadily rising from 100 to about 325
million
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dollars
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. Comparatively, since 2006, the value of the company's stock and real
estate
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 has only increased by about $50
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words estate, gold, art, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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