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Write about the following topic: Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In recent years, more and more individuals are taking medication to treat themselves without advice from medical physicians.
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 a positive development because
people
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 might not know the underlying
disease
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 so they might miss the best chance of finding and treating it or they might get some
side
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effects
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 from trying the medicine. On the one hand, health problem is not a simple thing, it's possible to miss the potential causes of a simple symptom. Nowadays,
people
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 can find information about their
disease
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 on
internet
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 and
significant
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a significant
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 number of
people
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are trusting
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this
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 information.
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 some data related to
disease
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 are true, most
people
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 don't know
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 differentiate incorrect information. Despite
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, if the explanation about a health problem is correct, some
people
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 do not use it correctly and they are just looking for the similarity of their symptoms.
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, even
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though highly
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 experienced doctor needs some investigations or cooperation from other physicians to reach the correct diagnosis, it's less likely general
people
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 can confirm their medical problems without qualified knowledge.
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, all
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medications have different purposes and specific
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effects
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. If
people
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 use it in
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 wrong situation, it will not be effective for the
disease
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 and it might bring some
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effects
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, some medications are contraindicated for hypertension patients and if they take those medications, it will worsen their hypertension symptoms. In conclusion,
people
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 should be
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of
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about
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 using medicines without
prescription
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a prescription
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 from doctors since they can't confirm what kind of health problem they have and the medication might not
working
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 and give unwanted
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effects
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