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The line grath compares the amount of books borrowed in June, July, August and September in 2014 from four rural libraries, and pie chart illustrates percentage of books, by sort, wich were adopted during that time.

The line grath compares the amount of books borrowed in June, July, August and September in 2014 from four rural libraries, and pie chart illustrates percentage of books, by sort, wich were adopted during that time.
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The line graph outlines the
number
 of
books
 rented from rural
libraries
 in four months of 2014, and the
piechart
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 shows the data on
variety
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 of
janres
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genres
janes
according to
 the preference of people from these
libraries
. In general, the
number
 of publications borrowed fluctuated over the period.
Also
 costs to mention that fiction class took a stable popularity among readers. As it is presented, the highest
number
 of
books
 taken, precisely 300 items, were from Ryeship
libraries
 in June 2014. 250
books
 were rented from Sutton Wood exactly at that time, which is
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the
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second place. West Eaton and Churchmount used to provide
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equal
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number
 of
books
 which is 50 items to their book lovers in June 2014.
Interesingly
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Interestingly
, the
number
 of
books
 subscribers rented from Ryeslip
libraries
 declined steadily over the next months and ended up with just over 150 in September of that year. The most
fluctuationg
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fluctuating
 pattern
observed
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 for Sutton Wood library,
however
 in September it reached the highest
number
 of borrowers who ordered 300
books
,
it
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 is almost double more than from other
centers
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.
The
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 similar lending trend showed Church Mount and West Eaton, they gave for the rent 150
books
 in September 2014. It is obvious, that fiction was borrowed by most of the readers, we can see that 40% of the rented printed works
falls
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 into
this
 category. The ratio for history and science classification accounted for 14% each and that was 5% lower than for biography category.
Interesengly
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Interestingly
, the percentage for self-help was exactly 10% of the pie, it was the least chosen type of
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jane
genre
 for the
subscibers
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subscribers
 of village
libraries
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, libraries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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