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One of the wildely discussed issues nowadays is that tourism creates different problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water.

#tourism #pollution #flights #transport #water
One of the
wildely
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widely
 discussed issues nowadays is that tourism creates different problems,
such
 as pollution
due to
 flights, transport and dirty water. It is undeniable that pollution
became
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 an essential part of our
life
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lives
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. In
this
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 I will look at some reasons,
examine
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and examine
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 factors responsible for
clean
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a clean
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 environment. One of the main causes of air pollution is that people use
varieties
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 of transport in everyday life. It is a result of innovation in technology. The second cause that might be noted, in my view, is that there is an overpopulation in our planet of Earth. Before, hundreds of years ago, when there
were
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 no means of transport, people used camels and horses for long voyages. It took a long period of time to move from
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one
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places
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 to another, as our ancestors used to be nomads. The first cause mentioned above has led to
dirty
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 environment we live in.
Also
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 it provoked polluted air and water. Another problem that follows is that our generation will live in
a
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such
 circumstances. Of course, all transports we use are very useful for us. But we should think about
nation's
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 health. One of the
consequence
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 of
this
 problem is that our Government have to impose some extra taxes on flights or
accomodation
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accommodation
 to restrict
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry. What we now need are actions
agains
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against
 polluters. Having
eighed
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weighed
designed
eight
 everything mentioned up, I came to
conclusion
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the conclusion
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 that it is important to start
from
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immediately
from
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today if we want our children to live in a safer and
clean
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cleaner
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 World.
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