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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #study #home #school
It is debated that
students
 should
study
 from home
instead
 of having
lessons
 at
school
. In
this
 essay, the writer concludes that
students
 should be encouraged to
study
 at
school
 in order to get the best qualities of education and enhance other essential skills. The most important benefit of going to
school
 is it will keep
teenagers
to concentrate
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 on
lessons
 and
take
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taking
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 the tests honestly. Because
teenagers
 do not have adequate discipline,
so
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apply
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they spend their time
on
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playing and relaxing rather than
focus
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focusing
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 on their
lessons
 at home. Another example is
while
 taking
test
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the test
a test
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 online,
students
 can gain helps
through
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by
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 copying from the internet or chatting with their friends. All of
these problem
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this problem
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 can be solved as long as
teenagers
 examine in a stricter and more formal
school
 environment.
Consequencely
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Consequently
, scores refer to their own abilities, and they can be taught with more suitable
lessons
instead
 of depending on
limited
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 knowledge of their parents if they
study
 from home. Schools not only provide a huge amount of knowledge but
also
 a friendly environment where
students
 can have more good terms with their friends. They
also
 get used to
speak
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 in front of
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the publics
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publics
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public
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,
behave
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behaving
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 politely with teachers at
school
 and
manage
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managing
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 the time to enter the
school
 on time. These essential soft skills play a crucial role
on
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in
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 their success in the future. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
school
 is the best environment to
study
 for
teenagers
 as
the
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high-quality courses are provided and soft skills can be
practiced
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 frequently.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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