The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The process diagram dispites the

production

forzen

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frozen

fish

pies.

Overall

, It can

bee

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show examples

seen

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is seen

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that there are 3 main stages to complete for

whole

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the whole

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production

, and the manufacturing

proceidure

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procedure

procedures

used two main

intigrents

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interests

to get

final

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the final

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product namely Potatoes and fresh

salmon

. The first

digagram

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diagram

shows how potatoes are

invoved

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involved

with

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the

production

fish

pies.

Initially

, potatoes are stored for

alomost

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almost

one month before they are ready to be processed. Once the main intigrent added to the

production

line, it

get

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gets

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cleaning

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cleaned

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peeling

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peeled

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and sliced

in to

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into

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small

peaces

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pieces

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by using

knife

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a knife

the knife

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. Afterwords, potato slices are

boile

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boiled

boiler

through

boiler

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the boiler

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and cooled for some time.In the first

satge

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stage

of making

fish

pies, chilled potato slices are moved in to store container.

Secondly

, the other main material, fresh

salmon

processed for

the

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apply

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pie

production

. During

the

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apply

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this

processed, fresh

salomn

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salmon

salon

covered

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is covered

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with lemon

juise

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juice

salt

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and salt

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, after that, seasoned

salmon

are

putting

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put

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in to

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into

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oven

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the oven

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and steamed. Once

salmon

got

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gets

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soft skins and bones are removed by

labros

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labourers

and moved on to inspect them.

Next,

the

fish

is mixed with cooked peas and sauce.

Final

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The final

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step is potato slices are mixed with

fish

, contuniuing

this

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This

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mixture will wrapped

and

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apply

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freezed

them

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apply

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and

store

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stored

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for dispatch.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, fish, salmon with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
36
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

205 words

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