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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process diagram dispites the
production
 of
forzen
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frozen
fish
 pies.
Overall
, It can
bee
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be
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seen
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is seen
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 that there are 3 main stages to complete for
whole
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the whole
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production
, and the manufacturing
proceidure
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procedure
procedures
 used two main
intigrents
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interests
 to get
final
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the final
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 product namely Potatoes and fresh
salmon
. The first
digagram
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diagram
 shows how potatoes are
invoved
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involved
with
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in
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 the
production
 of
fish
 pies.
Initially
, potatoes are stored for
alomost
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almost
 one month before they are ready to be processed. Once the main intigrent added to the
production
 line, it
get
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gets
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cleaning
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cleaned
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,
peeling
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peeled
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 and sliced
in to
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into
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 small
peaces
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pieces
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 by using
knife
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a knife
the knife
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. Afterwords, potato slices are
boile
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boiled
boiler
 through
boiler
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the boiler
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 and cooled for some time.In the first
satge
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stage
 of making
fish
 pies, chilled potato slices are moved in to store container.
Secondly
, the other main material, fresh
salmon
 processed for
the
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apply
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pie
production
. During
the
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apply
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this
 processed, fresh
salomn
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salmon
salon
covered
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is covered
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 with lemon
juise
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juice
,
salt
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and salt
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, after that, seasoned
salmon
 are
putting
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put
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in to
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into
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oven
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the oven
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 and steamed. Once
salmon
got
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gets
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 soft skins and bones are removed by
labros
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labourers
 and moved on to inspect them.
Next,
the
fish
 is mixed with cooked peas and sauce.
Final
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The final
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 step is potato slices are mixed with
fish
 , contuniuing
this
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This
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 mixture will wrapped
and
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apply
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freezed
them
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apply
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and
store
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stored
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 for dispatch.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, fish, salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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