IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#students #study #home #school
It is argued whether studying from home or at
school
 is the best way for students. From the writer’s perspective, it is better to go to
school
 to get high-quality materials from teachers and develop social skills despite the convenience and easily accessible materials when studying online. Undeniably, it is much more convenient to be able to do other necessary things
while
 balancing the study from online classes.
However
, the lack of face-to-face contact from attending online courses can lead to disconnection outside the world and loss of opportunities for being employed after leaving
school
.
In contrast
, studying in a
school
 environment where there are lots of friends to make, helps to extend the external relationship and probably has more chances and benefits afterwards.
Hence
, it is true that making friends at
school
 is easier than studying lonely at home.
Moreover
, studying at
school
 can be easy to get good materials from teachers,
although
 there is plenty of subject matter from the Internet. It is because the quality of information on the web is unclearly and sometimes they might be incorrect,
whereas
 teachers from
school
 can easily assist students to get the problem and good solution. In conclusion, getting to
school
 can make more friends, expand more relationships, and have a good study process plus reliable study data, which leads to a better career.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: