The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country
The chart illustrates the information about recycling four kinds of material during
28-year
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the 28-year
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period from 1982 to 2010 in a specific country. There was a dramatic increase in recycling
aluminium
while
the others
remain
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unsteady. The unit here is
percentage
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a percentage
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.
Overall
, the recycling
rate
of Glass containers
,
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and aluminium
Aluminium
cans saw an upward trend,
while
Paper and cardboard rose slightly at first and decreased and fluctuated.
Additionally
, despite seeing a decrease, Paper and cardboard still showed the highest
rate
than any other materials through the time frame. Plastics remained stable between 1982 and 2010. Looking at the
rate
of Paper and cardboard, it increased unsteadily from 65% in 1982
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to exactly 80% in 1990, but
then
decreased substantially down to 70% in 2010.
Furthermore
, Glass containers
also
saw a sizeable decrease but had increased most of the time. Decreased from 50% in 1982, down to 40% in 1990, before
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moderately to 60% in 2010. Moving on to the recycling
rate
of
Aluminium
cans, began at nearly 5% in 1986,
then
increased dramatically and reached
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it
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peak
45
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% in 2010.
While
Aluminium
cans had a lightning speed, Plastics
was
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more steady,
began
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at approximately 3%, it gradually
increased
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to about 8% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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